Script Redrafted

SCENE ONE: LAKES.

* Arrives at lakes and is running when she begins to here scary/freeky noises.*

Charlie: (questioning) "Hello?" 

*There is no answer so she continues to run. She sees a freaky scary character go behind a tree but she carries on running*

SCENE TWO: ARRIVING HOME 

*Charlie walks through the front door*

Charlie: (Shouts) "Mum Dad, I'm home." *walks into the kitchen to find her mum and dad* 

Sue: "Oh hi hun how was your run?" 

Charlie: "It was....strange." 

Andrew: "Were there many people about? see the usuals?"

Charlie: "No thats why it was so weird, normally there are a few people about, people walking the dogs or out with the kids but it was just me today"

Andrew: "well you can hardly blame them, after all it is November. People dont like to go out in the cold"

Charlie: "yeah but this time was different Dad. Something just doesnt feel right." 

Sue: "hunny I think you are just being paranoid. So what people decided not to go out today, no big deal"

Charlie: "..............But i did see someone. Or at least I think i did."

Sue: "what do you mean?"

Charlie: "well I was running and something just didnt feel right. I could hear noises and then I saw someone go behind a tree. One minuet they were there the next they had gone"

Andrew: (quickly) "What did they look like?!" 

Charlie: "I dont really know. I didnt see much"

*panicked/ suspicious silence* 

Sue: (optimistically) "I'm sure it was nothing"

SCENE THREE: 

*Everyone is sitting in the living room when they here scary noises*

Charlie: "what was that?"

*The family runs into the kitchen*

Andrew: "I cant see anyone!?" 

Charlie: "quick run!"

*the family runs back into the living room. It goes silent and they can here footsteps. The door slams open and the lights go out

Charlie: (scream)